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Letters to Elected Officials - The Dragon's Mortal Morsel
I don't bite... much
kendaer
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Letters to Elected Officials
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juuro From: juuro Date: February 25th, 2004 10:01 pm (UTC) (Link)
I like the firm, determined but non-hostile phrasing you have there.

While I understand that the greater government may not be ready to contemplate poly situations, I do feel that it might have been possible to say something like "the persons concerned" and leave it to the reader's prejudices to decide that it means two persons.

Hm. Perhaps not. Such modification seems to weaken the impact.
kendaer From: kendaer Date: February 25th, 2004 10:10 pm (UTC) (Link)
Yeah, I had initially tried writing it with non-specificity on the numbers of people involved. That didn't sound anything but wishy-washy and that isn't want I wanted at all.

Therefore I went with 2 as the 'default' number of people that most people would think of as constituting a marriage (any discrete number worked for impact)
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